was not a time to ignore that which the strange silence shouted, "Stop and be still! Stop while you can!"
That sentence is rather clumsy. It doesn't really flow. I think it's the "That which" that does it for me.
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And he jumped off the cliff, eh? A very interesting start, no doubt. I wonder what it was?
But yes, very nice start. I'll be looking forward to seeing more of this. Hopefully we get another masterpiece like Outlander, eh?
Well done, continue please!
02-Sep-2008 05:10:21