RuneScape Forum Archive | ~The Treasure of Raduon~

Slay Orc 681

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-Currently rated as the #2 author in The Collection-
-Currently rated as the #3 story in The Collection-
***This story is currently undergoing editing as of 12/6/08. When I am done, the new version will be posted as a new thread.***
***An example of the changes that are going to be made can be found at the bottom of page 5502 of the Story Discussions***
***The bottom post of this page will contain my current progress in the re-write***
~The Treasure of Raduon~
Greetings all, whether you are a reader, a fan, a fellow author, or just stopping by for a quick look. As you can see I'm Gaurdian1232, but just ignore the typo and call me Guard (I will seriously kill you if you call me Gaurd.

). I have been on these forums for almost three years as of the time I'm starting this story (I've actually been for for four, but haven't been an active member of the community until about three years ago), and I have written more than a dozen stories.
This story is a pirate story (it is NOT however the stereotypical pirate story) that has lots of twists as well as subtle humor. You will not be disappointed.

Now for the part nobody likes, the rules!
~Rules~
-All standard Jagex rules apply.
-No flaming.
-No spamming.
-No hijacking. (This is advertising your story on my thread without my permission.)
-Constructive criticism is welcome.
-If you see any errors, please POINT THEM OUT! This will only help improve my writing, and I will not be offended by you pointing out a flaw.
-If you read this, please don't just leave and go on to the next story. Post your thoughts.
If any of these rules are broken, I will give you one warning. If you do not heed the warning and stop then I will get a moderator and have them hide your posts. At that point I will request you never post on my thread again unless I say it is alright to do so. So don't break the rules!
-Guard

23-Nov-2007 19:25:07 - Last edited on 06-Dec-2008 22:22:45 by Slay Orc 681

Slay Orc 681

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Total story posts: 30
~Table of Contents~
Introduction - Page 1
Chapter 1 - Page 8, 10, 11
Chapter 2 - Page 18, 19, 34, 39
Chapter 3 - Page 41, 42, 49
Chapter 4 - Page 50, 63
Chapter 5 - Page 70,

-Guard

23-Nov-2007 19:25:13 - Last edited on 04-Dec-2008 00:55:46 by Slay Orc 681

Slay Orc 681

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~Credentials and Reviews~
Signatures:
-Currently rated as the #2 author in The Collection-
-Currently rated as the #3 story in The Collection-
~\^/~ Maestro of The Amethyst Library ~\^/~
-•=»‡«=•- Gold Pen of the Writer's Temple -•=»‡«=•-
(_.·°¯°·._) Golden•Quill•of•the•Opal•Quill (_.·°¯°·._)
‡—~^*Supreme Writer of The Writer's Pen~^~—‡
^v^ Member Of The Yanillian Library ^v^
~<+>~ Founder of The Champion's Quill ~<+>~
~^v^~Teacher of the Magical Ink~^v^~ (old version run by Auro)
-•=»‡«=•- Tales-of-the-Tavern-Hall-of-Fame -•=»‡«=•-
>~< Extreme Author of the Ardougne Story Guild >~<
~^V^~Member of The Domain - Writer~^V^
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• Member of The Magical Ink • Characteristic • Experienced •
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~*~*The Treasure of Raduon, tenth best story -- Story Awards 2007*~*~
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~Gaurdian1232, Teller of Tales, Weaver of Lore~
:: The Oldest Owl of the Story Forums ::
Dubbed 'Guard the Savior' by Scouteh for bringing back Smurfehlicious.
-Proud to be a forumer for over five years-

Reviews:
-94.6%
-88%
-85%, though the reviewer gave my story an 'A,' which, I quote, means: Excellent, highly recommended.
-100%
(At the time of these reviews I had a lot of mechanics errors which have now been fixed. Expect a lot better from now on.)
-Guard

23-Nov-2007 19:25:19 - Last edited on 04-Dec-2008 00:55:36 by Slay Orc 681

Slay Orc 681

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~Special Thanks~
These are people who have helped me with any of my stories or are noteworthy friends or fans.
Smurf Black
Capt Chekaka
Auroke(c)as - My former student until he quit.

Chuklz
Dav Dog92
Isocheim
Abyszero
Raynfalldown
Level
Letters
Sourmilk7
Dreamweaver
Lance Tiger
WKC (Baeryn)
Elitemage14
*(c)igurdur130
Fred Zeppeli
Genzen Han
Slay1820 (Xen Wolfe)
Charmeddude0
Jube
7swordsman55
Whitewolf492 (Judooooo -blood splat-) (Inside joke)
Poller5
Joppeh Jeh
Sokreshel (Dragon 3011)
Blue Orb 7
Doug
Lastly, the most important spot on here goes to Pyros Magnus. It was he who inspired me to begin writing many years ago.
*If anyone thinks they need to be on here, tell me and I may or may not put you here.*
-Guard

23-Nov-2007 19:25:26 - Last edited on 07-Dec-2008 06:02:10 by Slay Orc 681

Slay Orc 681

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~Ratings~
Abyszero: 10/10
Mimic100: 4/5
Charmeddude0: 9/10
Par Ohmsfurd: 9/10
7swordsman55: 9.5/10
Smurf Black: 200000/10 (This was on SD and is partly a joke between us.) XD
Dragon 3011: 8.5/10
Riot Racer55: 10/10
Guinndog13: 9/10
Capt Cheka*a: 9/10
There have been a lot of positive opinions from people here, but they gave no rating.
-Guard

23-Nov-2007 19:25:32 - Last edited on 07-Dec-2008 01:32:06 by Slay Orc 681

Slay Orc 681

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~Current Goals~
( ) = Incomplete
(*) = Complete
(*)Earn the rank of Maestro from TAL.
(* )Have a story in the top 10 of The Collection. This story is currently ranked as the third.
(* )Become a Top Ten Author of The Collection. I am currently rated as #2. Happy day.
^^ Now that my goals are complete, I'm bored. If anyone has ideas for new goals, please say so.
-Guard

23-Nov-2007 19:25:38 - Last edited on 06-Dec-2008 05:10:00 by Slay Orc 681

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~Introduction~
-264 years before present time, Gielinor-
The colossal boat shook violently as a cannonball struck its oak hull. The sea surged with such strength and anger from the storm that it seemed the world itself would be drowned. Lightning crashed from the black clouds, striking the ocean as if to retaliate against its force. All around men's shouts could be heard, and the clash of swords along with the pounding of the cannons created a deafening noise. The Vanquisher and the Pyro were locked in titanic battle.
The crew from the pirate ship, Pyro, was desperately trying to fight back the royal navy. Blood covered the deck of the ship and corpses lay strewn across it, constantly being tossed around by the rocking of the boat or from cannon fire. Although the pirates were battle hardened and superior in weaponry, they were greatly outnumbered and were tired from hours of fighting. They had been chased for almost two weeks by the Vanquisher and as they were almost away, they were caught in a hellish hurricane.
Blackhand stood in a battle ready stance, with three soldiers surrounding him. His face was rugged and weary, and his long black hair was messy and tangled. He wore a simple brown pirate hat on his head and a blood-drenched leather coat covered the majority of his muscular body. In each hand he carried a serrated scimitar, covered in blood. As he made battle on his own, his crew was being slowly wiped out.

23-Nov-2007 19:25:49 - Last edited on 13-Jan-2008 15:45:32 by Slay Orc 681

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The naval soldiers wore steel-plated armor, which made them almost impervious to blunt weapons. This advantage came at the cost of their maneuverability. It seemed as though the pirates were fighting moving, thinking fortresses.
He let out a great roar and attacked the heavily armored soldiers. He spun and slashed one of them in the neck; then, while dodging an attack from a massive broadsword, stabbed another. The boat shook as lightning struck the mast, and set the boat on fire. Blackhand looked around him, and realized that he was the last of his crew left alive. Around twenty soldiers were approaching him, ready to slaughter the infamous captain. He dashed across the deck, narrowly dodging attacks by the soldiers. He was shot in the leg by a crossbow bolt only a moment before jumping into the water. Several soldiers ran and looked over the edge, but could not see where he went. They only assumed that he would drown from the massive waves and the inability to move his leg.

The ship rattled, and then there was a great cracking noise as it split in two and slowly sank into the vicious ocean. The soldiers on the boat scattered onto theirs, and watched as the once mighty and feared ship, Pyro, was swallowed by the depths of the ocean.
And so ended the legacy of the last true pirate, Blackhand, who had burned cities, destroyed entire fleets, and had managed to escape death hundreds of times.
For centuries his ship sank slowly into the sand and eroded more and more until it was gone completely. Now his treasure remains buried in the sand, the treasure that would turn the most selfless man mad with greed, the treasure that even the Gods were envious of. And so it sat in the sand, waiting for centuries to be found; the treasure of King Julin, last king of the mighty Raduonian nation.

23-Nov-2007 19:25:55 - Last edited on 30-Nov-2008 19:09:22 by Slay Orc 681

Slay Orc 681

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~Endorsed Stories and Threads~
Imp Nest Reviews
The Golden Pen
The Incredibly Gifted Authors
Legacy of the Three Kings
The Amethyst Library
The Admiral's Fleet
Corruption
The Citadel
The Anthology
War's Finale
The Academies
Your First Story
[More will come as I update this]
-Guard

23-Nov-2007 19:26:01 - Last edited on 16-Dec-2008 03:21:27 by Slay Orc 681

Slay Orc 681

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Re-write progress:
Introduction: First post completed.
Chapter one: Incomplete.
Chapter two: Incomplete.
Chapter three: Incomplete.
Chapter four: Incomplete.
Chapter five: Incomplete.
-Guard

23-Nov-2007 19:26:07 - Last edited on 06-Dec-2008 22:05:45 by Slay Orc 681