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Review from "The Iron Writers Of RS".


35/Plot: The plot was very well done and written out. A bit fast at first, but overall it was very good.

Originality-19/20. I've only heard of one book that's a bit similar to this, but other then that, it was amazing.

Flow-13.5/15. It was, like I said before, a bit fast, but was extremely well written.

So for the overall plot, 32.5/35.


20/Grammatical Errors: There were a couple of period mistakes when Joran was thinking to himself. Other then that, your only main problem was double wording. What I mean is this-You spelled it "face mask". It's actually "Facemask". You spelled it "Crew mates" when it's actually "Crew-mates". There were others, but I didn't point them out enless you want me to. Anyways, 16/20.

30/Description: 27/30. Amazing...truly amazing. There were a couple of parts where you could of explained it more, but other then that, very well done.

15/Characters: 13/15. Each character had their own seperate personality, which was very good. It was a tab bit shifty, but overall it was well done.

12-Apr-2008 00:28:50 - Last edited on 12-Apr-2008 01:05:43 by [#PCMMMHAN6]

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88.5%. You, Guardian, are a...


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Iron Writer! Congratulations! You may get a signature which is on page one of the thread, and I'll be sure to add you to the library.

12-Apr-2008 00:29:02 - Last edited on 12-Apr-2008 01:07:55 by [#PCMMMHAN6]

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