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~Mitch

05-Oct-2011 19:38:24

Heh, a lot of these look familiar. I might go back through them again later, in knowledge that the quality is fantastic. Thanks for creating this thread.

06-Oct-2011 04:04:43

Really? Wow. That means a lot to me, Lebbeh. Thank you.

~Mitch

06-Oct-2011 12:11:18

Okay, I read your contest entry. It's quite well-written, particularly towards the end, but I'd watch some repetition. There are couple examples with "the warrior", and this one below is just another one:

"He looked behind him as he staggered up and found the Mahjarrat behind him."

You'd probably benefit to go back through and fix those up.

Would you mind giving mine a read, if you found the time? It's on my short story thread entitled "The Curse". I need to change a few details which don't really make sense, but I'd appreciate any feedback I can get.

Good luck with the contest. It's nice to see a couple of new names joining in, too, so we'll see how we fare.

06-Oct-2011 15:18:56

Yes, I noticed some of those repetitions when I went through editing. I'm doing something new which is helping me a ton. I print out everything I write and I edit it on paper.Anyway, I will take care of those edits and get an updated version on the contest thread soon.

I will have time later to read your story.

~Mitch

06-Oct-2011 17:57:57

Excellent, and thank you very much.

06-Oct-2011 18:02:57

The entry has been edited and put on the competition thread.

~Mitch

07-Oct-2011 04:00:59

I read it and it's a lot better. Good luck.

07-Oct-2011 04:13:56

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