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Lance Tiger** Review
Spelling/Grammar- 30/30 Points- Your spelling and grammar is near perfection. I saw maybe only 1 mistake, and it was very small one. An excellent grade in this aspect.
Characters- 30/35- Your characters were very humorous, but it got to me sometimes when your Elite Noob and Josh- I mean John
, were acting too stupid. The bits were generally funny though, especially John commenting on lava being red water.
Plot- 20/30- This was the weakest point in your story for me. Your plots were bizarre sometimes for me, with the Gods, cats, Elite Noob and John, and the Wise Man from Draynor appearing with each other all of a sudden. It’s crucial for a Noob story to have random plots, but it seemed that it happened too often for yours.
Humor- 25/30- In the beginning, your character, Elite Noob, was very random for my liking. In fact, I have to admit that I had my doubts when he was exclaiming rants about cheese doodles??? But on page 43-44, your chapters were excellent.
Overall- 110/125 Points- Your story is very good, and I would hope to see you write more in the style of the late chapters, for the beginning was funny, but not as much as you honed your skillets. You entered the Hall of Fame, the first Noob story to enter. (Angelic Voices ring throughout the thread) Your thread is now holy with the power of it.
-Smurfie Blurfie.
Spelling/Grammar- 30/30 Points- Your spelling and grammar is near perfection. I saw maybe only 1 mistake, and it was very small one. An excellent grade in this aspect.
Characters- 30/35- Your characters were very humorous, but it got to me sometimes when your Elite Noob and Josh- I mean John
, were acting too stupid. The bits were generally funny though, especially John commenting on lava being red water.
Plot- 20/30- This was the weakest point in your story for me. Your plots were bizarre sometimes for me, with the Gods, cats, Elite Noob and John, and the Wise Man from Draynor appearing with each other all of a sudden. It’s crucial for a Noob story to have random plots, but it seemed that it happened too often for yours.
Humor- 25/30- In the beginning, your character, Elite Noob, was very random for my liking. In fact, I have to admit that I had my doubts when he was exclaiming rants about cheese doodles??? But on page 43-44, your chapters were excellent.
Overall- 110/125 Points- Your story is very good, and I would hope to see you write more in the style of the late chapters, for the beginning was funny, but not as much as you honed your skillets. You entered the Hall of Fame, the first Noob story to enter. (Angelic Voices ring throughout the thread) Your thread is now holy with the power of it.
-Smurfie Blurfie.
16-Jul-2007 00:27:35
Hope it helped
16-Jul-2007 01:20:54
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