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Venmi

Venmi

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Yeah. I should update the ToC for you. This will show you my critic skill is better than my writing.
~ (V)ßTS¢T ~ Owner of Quest Cape ~ Head Rater & Librarian of TYL ~ Teacher at TAoR ~ Host of TSRE ~ #8 reviewer in TC ~ Owner of TCN ~ Co-leader at TMI ~ Nicknamed Mitch ~

10-Feb-2008 00:23:37

Chuk

Chuk

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I've read the first few posts so far.
You've got some usage errors and tense changes, but it certainly isn't bad. Also, the action takes place exceedingly quickly to my mind. Liven things up a little more by describing the fights better and it would be much better.
If I were to rank you here, I would say you're between apprentice and adept. That's not your ranking yet; it's just some helpful information.

10-Feb-2008 00:50:02 - Last edited on 10-Feb-2008 00:51:36 by Chuk

Venmi

Venmi

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You haven't seen my most recent chapters, then. They're much better than when I first started.
~ (V)ßTS¢T ~ Owner of Quest Cape ~ Head Rater & Librarian of TYL ~ Teacher at TAoR ~ Host of TSRE ~ #8 reviewer in TC ~ Owner of TCN ~ Co-leader at TMI ~ Nicknamed Mitch ~

10-Feb-2008 00:51:50

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