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23-Dec-2007 06:43:18

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Very good. I see you applied for the Ancient Scrolls, Riekan. I have a review thread, and will use my format, because it equals 225, just like TAS.

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Review for The Cursed Dragon: Part 1, by Reikan4

Grammar/Spelling -- 25/30 -- I only saw about 5 mistakes, and I didn't see any grammar mistakes.

Description/Voculary -- 17/20 -- Your vocabulary was okay, and I couldn't have done it better myself. Your descriptions showed me exactly what I should've seen, so I thank you for creating a clear image to show your readers.

Characters -- 65/90 -- Kaisen was interesting, along with Saren. I didn't really care about Kelda much, but that's just me. Kaisen was just an apprentice mage, and now the bearer of the egg. Saren was your most interesting character though. I haven't read anything which includes the Temple Knights, and I certaintly did not expect one at Morytania! I didn't care for Ael, really, either.

Plot/Conflict -- 68/75 -- This was very original! I've never heard anything like it. Andarra has the egg, and then the Dark Lord of Zamorak steals it. I don't exactly undertsnad how Andarra got the egg back, though. And one extra question: What *was* Saren's plan at Trollheim?

Title -- 10/10 -- Makes sense, short simple, easy to follow. Nothing else said.

Overall -- 185/225 -- Very well done, Riekan! The Cursed Dragon: Part 1 is Riekan's first story, and it was fabulous!

24-Dec-2007 06:45:16 - Last edited on 24-Dec-2007 06:48:02 by [#E4B29LWTR]

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