I understand your argument, but i completely disagree. Anyway, your intro really caught my attention and had a clear thesis statement, nice brah; but you sort of lost me in your body paragraphs, they lacked the necesary support, but as i went into your conclusion, i felt that it really summed up the overall argument and even pushed it into a farther topic.
In general, cool story bro.
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