Hi Anne's mom!
Anyway, Anne, finished with the review, sorry it took a while.
Technical (Grammar/Spelling/Syntax): 48 points. Very good. There were very few typoes at first, which I don't count off for, but then you spelled attention "attenshun", so that brought you down to a 49. Then a couple of grammar mistakes leave you with a 48.
Content (Plot/Description/Character Development): 42 points. It was simply a good story. Description and character development could improve a little, but very few stories are perfect in this category. And although it was a good, entertaining story, nothing special stood out.
Bonus points for originality: 0, again, nothing totally unique in this story, even though it was excellent.
Total: 90/100 A-
Great job, you're now number 1 of the three reviews on my thread and the first to get an A.
16-Nov-2006 23:28:33
