Well, I just finished reading this one. We went from many things, such as a 303 pages of a book somewhere, characters with conflicting opinions, an overuse of peoples’ shoulders being hurt and smirking, biting people to turn them into vampires to save them from poison, dancing rather than fighting, people flying around, odd dialogue, knights and assassins good at being dead, Dante fighting his clone or whatever, and most things I’ve already criticized about in my past two critiques. Unfortunately, I did not have the time or energy to offer another review, but it would only recreate what I’ve already complained about, and it’s not necessary. You will just have to take my word for reading your story, as I can offer little evidence off the top of my head.
I felt the story did a good job with the conflicting characters, many of whom had their own agendas that changed throughout the story. But the past few hundred posts are just your bumps, so if there was any more story after the alternative ending, then I will have had missed it.
Strangely enough, there seems to have been less people reading the sequel than the first, despite the sequel being superior in expansion and complexity. I suppose those two qualities kill interest for most people, but I am guilty in being unable to decipher the storyline before its end. I always liked stories that do deal with more than a few characters, especially when their plans change, so well done for that.
Not much else to say now, though. At least I think I am the first person to read this story in quite a while. Readers of older stories are a rarity it would seem.
You’ll have to forgive my efficiency; I said I would be able to finish all your stories within two months, I think last month, but I may not be able to finish what I said, as I have another’s authors stories to do as well. I cannot always keep my promises, but I can try nonetheless.
28-Jun-2013 23:12:42
