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Smeeze, that story was so awesome! For at least 6-7 chapters in the third book, it left me hanging on the edge of my seat. I'll give you a review in a minute. Tell me what you think of it.
Spelling/Grammar- 30/30- I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors as far as it mattered. Yes, Gerrick spoke improperly, but that was part of the story right
I can't lower your score cause of that.
Description/Vocabulary- 30/30- I saw everything I could see in your story. The description was so amazing, every little detail could be saw. It was just like watching a movie. I can see why you call it E Z Smeezy Productions lol. Your use of vocabulary was also incredible. I didn't see too many similies, metaphors, etc., but it had great detail none the less.
Plot- 30/30- I thought the plot was going to be simple. Zamorak gets brought back; Saradomin gets brought back; they fight; Guthix gets brought back and stops it. It was way more interesting than that. All the twists and turns made it a really suspenseful story.
Character Development- 30/30- The characters over time developed in way I would never have imagined. It was so well done. You were just like a real author at some points. For example, when Bydor betrayed Saradomin and then wanted balance. Just great! Also when Saradomin was going to use that spell. That was also surprising.
Organization- 29/30- This was the only thing that got me a bit. The paragraph orgainization was great, but when you change settings, it isn't really too noticable if you skip two paragraphs instead of just one. I'd put something like a --- or a *** inbetween the paragraphs with different settings. You get my point. Other than that, the organization was great.
Overall- 149/150- All and all, an amazing story. It was an honor to read a story like this. Everything that happened just left me hanging in suspense and every character seemed perfect for the story. Great job Smeeze and I hope you like the review.
Spelling/Grammar- 30/30- I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors as far as it mattered. Yes, Gerrick spoke improperly, but that was part of the story right
I can't lower your score cause of that.
Description/Vocabulary- 30/30- I saw everything I could see in your story. The description was so amazing, every little detail could be saw. It was just like watching a movie. I can see why you call it E Z Smeezy Productions lol. Your use of vocabulary was also incredible. I didn't see too many similies, metaphors, etc., but it had great detail none the less.
Plot- 30/30- I thought the plot was going to be simple. Zamorak gets brought back; Saradomin gets brought back; they fight; Guthix gets brought back and stops it. It was way more interesting than that. All the twists and turns made it a really suspenseful story.
Character Development- 30/30- The characters over time developed in way I would never have imagined. It was so well done. You were just like a real author at some points. For example, when Bydor betrayed Saradomin and then wanted balance. Just great! Also when Saradomin was going to use that spell. That was also surprising.
Organization- 29/30- This was the only thing that got me a bit. The paragraph orgainization was great, but when you change settings, it isn't really too noticable if you skip two paragraphs instead of just one. I'd put something like a --- or a *** inbetween the paragraphs with different settings. You get my point. Other than that, the organization was great.
Overall- 149/150- All and all, an amazing story. It was an honor to read a story like this. Everything that happened just left me hanging in suspense and every character seemed perfect for the story. Great job Smeeze and I hope you like the review.
27-Jun-2007 14:43:12 - Last edited on 28-Jun-2007 01:53:41 by Venmi
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