~*-*~ Review of the gods trilogy ~*-*~
93/100 Spelling and Grammar - I found very few grammar mistakes in the text. Although I did feel that at times more semi colons were needed in some points. This is one example: 'The only light was from the hundreds of cookfires among his camp. Thousands of soldiers devoted to the chaotic god.' having too many full stops/periods in a sentence tend to hinder the flow of a story and make it almost jumpy to put an adjective to it. Secondly, I found tenses were at times confused. This is demonstrated in: 'All Zamorakians *come* out of hiding and join the armies'; as far as I know come should have been 'came'.
Next, spelling; as far as I could tell I only noticed one spelling mistake in the entire trilogy. This is impressive. Both for grammar and spelling to have so little grievances in such a long story is amazing. Well done!
85/95 Vocabulary - I was a little dissappointed when I read this story to find the vocabulary that I did. Although I noticed little repetition of words, very often words were short and monosylabic. To me monosylabic words constantly used seem to rush the story and at times make the reader check back what he has read to clarify what is meant. On a brighter note, your vocabulary is vast and interesting, it is just monosylabic words that make your vocabulary seem less than what it really is.
84/95 Description - While I found the story entertaining and could picture most of it in my head I did have to use imagination in some sections. For instance, when you describe the gods you only describe their age (sometimes clothes are also described). Also, you barely describe the places at all; you seem to rely on people assasciating your places either with the game or with medievil history. This, I think, could use some work.
23-Apr-2007 17:39:08
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