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Wow. That's all I can say.
It's the first story on the forums I have read the whole way through, the reason being that it gripped me from the first paragraph. I couldn't stop. It wasn't too long, and definitely didn't drag on.
Can i just point out one mistake?
It was on page 15, story post 7 (that only includes story ones, not bumps by other people) and it was paragraph two:
'She was completely defenseless. Alison lunged once more at Alison, this time connecting with her arm,'
Alison lunged once more at Alison? Not quite sure that makes sense.
Absolutely terrific all the same.
It's the first story on the forums I have read the whole way through, the reason being that it gripped me from the first paragraph. I couldn't stop. It wasn't too long, and definitely didn't drag on.
Can i just point out one mistake?
It was on page 15, story post 7 (that only includes story ones, not bumps by other people) and it was paragraph two:
'She was completely defenseless. Alison lunged once more at Alison, this time connecting with her arm,'
Alison lunged once more at Alison? Not quite sure that makes sense.
Absolutely terrific all the same.
09-Sep-2007 07:43:23 - Last edited on 13-Sep-2007 09:05:43 by Sezza Says
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13-Sep-2007 09:04:43
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