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Chuk

Chuk

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Glad to see the bookmarks. :D
My plan for this thread is to rewrite at least one chapter a week and post it. Once I finish the final chapter on the last thread, I'll start work on rewriting the prologue and hopefully have it posted next week.
This gives all you people who thought this too long a chance to start while it's still short. And you should get better writing than what's on the original. :D

17-May-2010 20:28:21 - Last edited on 18-May-2010 04:10:17 by Chuk

Yrolg

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I really look forward to reading the rewrite. I hope that you can manage to get accepted to Yrolg's Reviews once it's done. :)
If I may make a suggestion before reading it, however, I would like to do so. Your title is unbecoming as is; readers generally stray from strange acronyms because they feel as if they will have difficulty understanding the story since they can hardly make out the title. I would suggest titling your thread, "Echoes of the Gods" and using the full title in your first post.
Once you finish rewriting this piece and begin work on the next, I can help you to further brainstorm how to best title your threads with permanent information. :)

30-May-2010 01:25:12 - Last edited on 30-May-2010 01:28:44 by Yrolg

Yrolg

Yrolg

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Not having read the story, I fear the relevancy of my opinions may be minute, but I do agree that the title, "Silence Fractured", is not at all appealing to the reader. Its almost passive undertones and clichéd connotation combine with an altogether unbecoming image to form a title which could, at best, garner a few of your intended audience.
People like more profound titles. :)
EDIT: Rereading this, I notice that if anyone but you were to read this, they would see a scathing critique of your title. :p

30-May-2010 13:40:27 - Last edited on 30-May-2010 13:41:23 by Yrolg

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