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Mattman875

Mattman875

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Yeah, that was just an examle. But sometimes that way you put across 'lonely' just didn't feel male, for some reason. Maybe change it to show and not tell, like 'There was no-one to play with, nobody to fight or hate, and most importantly, no-one to love.'.
Although that probably sounds a bit female, now I think about it...

07-Apr-2007 13:04:11

Roshinda

Roshinda

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Thanks Funkeh.
Yeah, he is. He's a loner type that doesn't fit in, which does often make one more sensitive. I'd have a lot harder time trying to write from the perspective of a "more typical" guy though, that's for sure.

07-Apr-2007 13:31:13

Roshinda

Roshinda

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I hate that these next few posts are so awkward and hard to write!
I've gotten a lot of advice from several guys I know, and they say I'm doing well with his voice so far, because of the sort of guy he is. This section is so hard to write though. I really want to move on to the next section. I should really fly through the story after that. I'm so excited about it, I keep dreaming about what happens and how to write it.

08-Apr-2007 03:12:17

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