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24-Jan-2009 18:44:37

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Yeah you do...

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--NOT the proud owner of the attack cape--
--NOT the proud owner of the defense cape--
--NOT the proud owner of the strength cape--
--NOT the proud owner of the quest cape--
--I AM the proud owner of the nothing cape!--
~*^*^*^*~A LOYAL BUMPER, IF NOTHING ELSE~*^*^*^*^*~

signature your as this use backwards this read to enough smart were you if
Slave-driver with a smile! :P
If at first you don't succeed, then skydiving definitely isn't for you.
Silence is golden, duct tape is silver.
Long siggy this is. Yoda I am.

04-Feb-2009 15:46:27

Poller5
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Well, apparently I didn't finish it D:
However, I have put a great amount of time into -thinking- about IS, especially the history of the world in which it's set -- decidedly different from the history of Gielinor as you know it. The new add will include a lot of that, and then I hope to jump into some awesome action and bring the story to an amazing cli<c>max. And then there's the sequel...

16-Feb-2009 21:30:41 - Last edited on 16-Feb-2009 21:31:02 by Poller5

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Hello, I am C0smic1 of The Novelists' Guild,
Just posting my apologies for the giant delay in the review.
I have assigned one of my reviewers to review this when he pleases; again, sorry for the delay.
Good luck =).

27-Feb-2009 05:03:40

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~~~~~~~~~~ The Novelists’ Guild ~~~~~~~~~~
~~Review of “Illuminating Shadows” By: xxsuperstarx ~~
~~~~ Score ~~~~
Plot: 20/20
Description: 20/20
Originality: 10/10
Thought: 10/10
Characters/Emotions: 18/20
Mechanics: 18/20
Total: 96%
~~~~ Reasons ~~~~
Plot: Your plot is marvelous. It starts out simple: A barbarian is captured. From there it just gets deeper and deeper it is exquisite
Description:Your description is wonderful. You describe everything in great detail and hook me from the beginning
Originality: Very original!
Thought: Very nice though, in fact perfect thought!
Characters: This is nearly perfect however, some characters including your mage are not described as well as I would like.
Mechanics: Your grammar is nearly spotless and devoid of any errors. You do however present some grammatical mistakes in your story. This is a common mistake nothing to worry about

~~~~ My thoughts ~~~~
-Good- Your plot has me hooked to be honest. I keep wanting more. You describe everything in depth. One thing that really stands out is your character development. I cannot describe how much that helped your story. It starts off as Halldór and Roghr being nothing but trainer and trainee. Then they start to actually become friends.
-Bad- A few grammatical mistakes here and there. In one main character and some secondary characters your description lacks a little.
~~~~ Summary ~~~~
Wow not much to say. You are a wonderful writer and have mastered the complexities of literature and grammar itself. You have left me standing in awe. Your story is nearly devoid of ANY errors whatsoever. A few errors here and there but nothing big. Your story is exquisite writing and a marvelous work to read. Immaculate and entertaining.

28-Feb-2009 02:13:43 - Last edited on 28-Feb-2009 03:09:40 by xxsuperstarx

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