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Hex the wolf

Hex the wolf

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:O *Pets Paduan* Im really sorry. I will try to post as soon as my friend gets back to me on something. I have to rest since im doing coledge and i have to get up early in the morning. I will try my best to get to this on the weekend..

EVERYTHING.. Ive been neglecting due to other stuff getting in my way im going to back to. Starting on the first things that have waited the most. And this thread is one of the first. :(


(( Rofl sorry if i anoyed you by the way. Its just when something keeps barking at me i wanna pet it :P ))

01-Sep-2010 07:18:07 - Last edited on 01-Sep-2010 07:18:54 by Hex the wolf

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Two things to say:

1) I agree with whoever said you wrote like you were texting. It makes the story harder to read, and disrupts the flow. (if you even care about that)

2) I (personally) find it hard to read when the format is in Roleplaying (?) format like this:

Chad: blah blah
Teacher: lajfjdjf
Kid: shut up


instead of this:

Chad was whispering to his friend, Kid, as the teacher was giving the lesson. His friend said "Shut up, she'll hear us."




Just personal preference, but this story has a great plot base, it just needs some, well, refining.

03-Sep-2010 03:22:56

Hex the wolf

Hex the wolf

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Rofl nice one... Um im sorta sick right now but ill hopefully get a idea in my head when i dont feel like vomiting -.- ANYWAY to the guy that left his comment i agree but i find it myself easier to read. Just not as fancy and or popular. Please note though this story is years old and written by me when i had alot less experience.

09-Sep-2010 08:19:07

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