Dude, This story rocks!
I have tried writing three stories about RuneScape, two of them in 3rd person and one in multi-view 1st person, but none have ended up being very good.
I have only read the first 6 chapters of your story, but I will definatly read the rest when it isn't 1am
I think you have a very amazing future ahead of you, and I would recommend selling this book on an online bidding or shopping site sometime!
I promise to be your first customer if you do start to sell it
P.S.
Do you mind if I print this out so I can read it away from the computer? I hope it is okay with you.