Hi there, I spotted a error on Page 7.
"“What do you suppose we do next?” asked Dallion, confused.
“Swim to the bottom?” suggested Trey.
“I suppose I’ll go first,” offered Dallion, diving into the fresh water. It was the first swim he had taken in weeks.
When Dallion hit the water, Trey said, “I would have made him do it anyway.” And he stared back down into the depths.
Dallion could see crystal clear through the water. His vision was, surprisingly, not funny. No doubt the water was enchanted. But his breathing was as normal as ever.
Dallion wanted to stay in the water forever. It was an enchantment; you could see the world for what it was down here. But he would have to press on.
A cave mouth was clearly seen at the bottom of the lake. Dallion swam towards it and looked through it. All he saw was dark walls, and then a light at the end of the tunnel.
Dallion broke the surface and called to Trey, “There’s a cave! We’ll have to leave Ratter behind!”
Trey plunged into the water with the other men. Bubbles exploded from their mouths as Dallion led them through the cave. The reached the tunnel’s end with haste, and found themselves on a platform."
You did that part twice! Lol! Hope you fix it! Its a wonderful story too!
21-Apr-2010 09:12:10
