Just read over the story. I must say that I was expecting a much less original take on the Christmas classic when I read Mark H's brief synopsis in the winners sticky, but I was pleasantly surprised! I love how you tied the story to Runescape everywhere you could. I definitely was not expecting the building mode joke!
Humour books aren't often funny in real life, but I think you could really make a career of it. In this very limited entry I saw more wit than I possibly saw in my entire life. I would absolutely love to read a book that has as many jokes per paragraph as this does.
As Mod Mark H said, you brought out the true spirit of Christmas very effectively. The comedy was a nice addition to make it not only a nice, but enjoyable read. Keep it up
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