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You made the effort to write up a review, the least I could do was respond to you in kind.
I took your advice and edited in the specific pieces of armour for clarification. And although this is obviously using the game's setting, I would like to portray that world as realistically as possible, so don't ever hesitate to point out anything that breaks your immersion in the tale. After all, fluidity is vital.
I wasn't being too serious when I said 'scolding,' by the by. I know emotions can get misconstrued over text-based interactions. In reality, I'm thankful that you read what you wrote, and even more appreciative of the fact that you took the time out in order to give a review. One cannot improve without constructive criticism after all, so feel free to break my story down into rubble if you are that way inclined.
I mean, I'm lazy, so I might not fix everything, but all criticism will be taken on board and be used to better myself in future writing endeavours.
I suppose I could include a section somewhere about game lore relevant to this story, in order to aid people who don't have an encyclopaedic knowledge of ingame events like me. This was written at a time when I wasn't aware the Story Forums had split off from Runescape-based stories only, so I suppose I've made a lot of false assumptions in writing this.
Anyway, the next chapter should be up tonight, need to just skim through and decimate any errors I made when I first wrote it. Hags be hagglin', gods be god damn crazy, it's all happening ogre at Into The Fire
I took your advice and edited in the specific pieces of armour for clarification. And although this is obviously using the game's setting, I would like to portray that world as realistically as possible, so don't ever hesitate to point out anything that breaks your immersion in the tale. After all, fluidity is vital.
I wasn't being too serious when I said 'scolding,' by the by. I know emotions can get misconstrued over text-based interactions. In reality, I'm thankful that you read what you wrote, and even more appreciative of the fact that you took the time out in order to give a review. One cannot improve without constructive criticism after all, so feel free to break my story down into rubble if you are that way inclined.
I mean, I'm lazy, so I might not fix everything, but all criticism will be taken on board and be used to better myself in future writing endeavours.
I suppose I could include a section somewhere about game lore relevant to this story, in order to aid people who don't have an encyclopaedic knowledge of ingame events like me. This was written at a time when I wasn't aware the Story Forums had split off from Runescape-based stories only, so I suppose I've made a lot of false assumptions in writing this.
Anyway, the next chapter should be up tonight, need to just skim through and decimate any errors I made when I first wrote it. Hags be hagglin', gods be god damn crazy, it's all happening ogre at Into The Fire
20-Jun-2015 00:00:56
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