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Jacme Slash

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Yeah... I think your right. I was skimming through some of them and they didn't look like the most perfect things ever.

20-Aug-2008 12:32:13

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Orbestro

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I was skimming through them as well, and it's not just grammar issues. There's omitted words, redundancy, and some ineffective metaphors too.
It's not horrible

, but as a reviewer, I'd love to get my hands on it.
~ O_o

rbie

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through and through.

20-Aug-2008 13:56:48

tmcz918

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I have to disagree with a large part of the romance section. I have'nt seen Pokemon, or Inu Yasha, but I have read Harry Potter. And I acctually predicted Ron would hook up with Hermione. Did you see how he changed his attitude towards Victor *rum, from adoring fan, to despising rival, all because Victor took Hermione to the dance. And in the first book, Hermione told harry to get the stone, while she helped Ron. And I would guess that the whole deal with Brock in Pokemon was supposed to be comical, after all, it is a TV show for 9 year olds. And I really have to disagree with the characters having to declare they love each other.
The reason people include pointless romance in their storys, is because ** helps us relate to the characters. In real life, romance happens all the time, so to make a story more reallistic and deep, the author will include it.

20-Aug-2008 14:22:59 - Last edited on 20-Aug-2008 15:24:47 by tmcz918

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Poller5

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I disagreed with it as soon as I saw it

Also, I despise romance in most stories. It's far too often blatantly contrived and adds very, very little.
So I never throw any into my stories

20-Aug-2008 18:11:10 - Last edited on 20-Aug-2008 18:12:07 by Poller5

CaptChekaka

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Alright, guys, a few things to cover.
First of all, the grammar in this guide *will* be fixed. I'd like to thank others for brining this to my attention and it will be dealt with quickly and quietly. The edits will come within the next few days and I think it should improve the overall focus of the guide. I'm sorry that I didn't get this sooner.
Secondly, some areas will be receiving rewrites over the next few days, probably concluding over the oncoming weekend. I'd like to thank the mods for giving Poller and I this opportunity, and we will be getting to fixing any sections that we deem to be below par.
Thirdly, we are going to be taking suggestions most likely in the near future regarding sections in our guide and how they can be improved. Any help will be accepted happily and wihtout question, but it will be looked at and reviewed thoroughly before any additions are made.
I'm sorry for the trouble,l and this will be straightened out.
Thanks,
Capt and Poller

20-Aug-2008 21:40:20