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Basandra

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One day, she didn't ask him to do his chores, this time Jal asked. - "So what are my chores today?"

"Today you can't, it's the day you're confronting Naoki, did you forgot?" - said Anna.

"I almost forgot! What about my training! You gave me chores everyday and I did not have time to train at all! How am I supposed to defeat him??" - Jal was upset. He knew that he was gonna lose in less than a few seconds...

"Oopsie Doopsie, sorry. I'm sure you're gonna figure out." - said Anna casually.

Jal went to the quartel. He was pretty nervous. Naoki was waiting for him in the center of the arena, Jal knew he was going to be humiliated so hard...

"So, are you ready?" - said Naoki.

"N-Not really... C-Can you g-give me a few more d-days?" - said Jal nervously.

"If you're not ready, to bad. You will have to try anyways."

Naoki went right to him so fast that Jal couldn't even think about moving. He fell on the ground and grabbed Naoki's feet and pushed him. Jal jumped high and started to shoot fireballs from his hands, then got on top of a pillar. - "I need more time!" - said Jal.

"You're doing allright, keep going." - said Naoki ignoring what Jaladi said.

Jaladi jumped to Naoki and he avoided the attack. He quickly countered it and throw Jal on the ground again. Jal got up and started running to find his stilts.

"This is not about doing what you did on your trainings, it is about what you've learned!" - screamed Naoki.

Naoki started to run after the jester and easly grabbed him in a matter of seconds. Jester knocked him back and shot his leg with fire. Naoki fell and Jal pointed his fingers on his head.

"Congratulations, you made it. You were ready afterall."

"Thanks. (I really did it! I defeated Naoki!)" - Jal was really happy.

"Not so fast little jester, you will have to work a little more on your skills." - said Naoki.

"Did you just read my mind?" - asked jester.

"Yes. That will be the next part of your training."
Puzzles are not real.

14-Jan-2015 23:58:56 - Last edited on 19-Jan-2015 02:39:14 by Basandra

Basandra

Basandra

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This time, Jal wasn't worried about the training, but about Naoki's skill to read minds. In every training he thought about what he did to the village before, and that he wanted to change. "What if Naoki thinks I can be a threat?" - thought Jaladi.

The training was in the next day.
When Jaladi arrived in the quartel, Naoki dragged him to a smaller room. "It's better for you to focus here, there's to much noise outside" - said Naoki. The room was almost empty, there was a red carpet and a broken mirror on the wall. Naoki lighted a few candles and sat down with Jaladi.

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You can post your opinions! The story is not finnished and I'm think about how fixing it later (gramatically, etc.) For now on, I'm gonna let you find out the rest of the story, I will post it somewhere else if you're interested.

Rate it 0-10.
Puzzles are not real.

14-Jan-2015 23:59:14 - Last edited on 19-Jan-2015 02:40:42 by Basandra

UFBA

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So far I like it!

I'd like to see you end the next part, I also think it would be cool if you added a story of how Jester's father found that he was the fire-bender and etc...

Some flashbacks would be cool as well. I'd rate it at 8.0.

- Stan, the Old level 3 skiller. -

15-Jan-2015 14:41:30

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