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I don't read many noob stories anymore, mainly because most of them are unoriginal and really not that funny. That isn't the case for this one :) It has original jokes in it, and it can be very funny at times. This is a great review coming from someone who hasn't seen a funny noob story in like 3 years >_<
Anyways, my only suggestions are to make the chapters a bit longer, and it got a bit too random at times :P (which ususally was still funny, but you know)
So anyways, good story :D

27-Jun-2007 19:04:03

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Your Review from Wish's Reviews:

Layout: 100/100
I admire how you put a space between every line. It made it easier to read.

Grammar: 300/300
You used correct tenses and words at all moments.

Spelling: 200/200
You spelled all words that I noticed are spelled correctly.

Plot: 300/800
The plot was cliche and unoriginal, though many noob stories are.

Overall: 955/1000
Fantastic!

Try to improve the humor a bit though, and go over it, adding some extra jokes.

28-Jun-2007 06:19:04 - Last edited on 28-Jun-2007 06:34:09 by [#PPAFSZV0N]

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