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Orbestro
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Orbestro

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Okies, but it's the last chapter that you had added? I'm going to assume so and do your official review.
~* watch this space - or not XD *~
~ O_o rbie
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06-Oct-2007 21:45:50 - Last edited on 06-Oct-2007 22:03:33 by Orbestro

Orbestro
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Orbestro

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Aw, well, it looks like this will be the last Tales of the Tavern review for a whlie. All good things must come to an end I suppose. Anyway, here we go:
The following is your official ~Tales of the Tavern~ review!
Grammar- 24/25 - Quite good, especially for a noob story (no offense). There was really only one mistake that I found, and I've alreayd pointed it out.
Spelling- 22/25 - Several problems, nothing terrible but enough to take you down a few points.

Plot- 46/50 - The thing that I took point off for is the fact that there isn't one overall, connecting plot. You have several large plotlines that prevade the story, and come back in later (I found the blender! :P ) but nothing that connects it all.
Pace- 15/15 - Perfect really, it REALLY kept my interest. The trouble was getting my interest in the first place, which had nothing to do with your story :@
Characters- 32/40 - You have lots of characters with distinctive (and hysterical) traits, but they don't develop at all. In a story like this it's hard to do, I realize, but Elite Noob and John could've at least learnt what 1+1 is XD
Tilt- 10/10- Hilarious, I loved it! Perfect score here ^_^
Overall: 149/165 - Awesome job! I can't wait to read the new chapters!
~ O_o rbie
Lorehound
through and through.

06-Oct-2007 22:03:20

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