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A few suggestions since your rhyming is a bit off, I will try to keep the general theme though. (Rhyme scheme included)

A - Once upon a time in the runite mine
B - There was a hermit named Mike
A - He traveled with nothing but wine
B within B - and a few pike for the hike

C - He was a man of his word
C - Hiding away behind the mask of a bird
D - One day Mike saw a girl named Ava
D - Walking around in a cape of lava

E - To a capeless man she wouldn't speak
E - So Mike decided Jad he would seek
F - He tried his hand at the lava cave
F - But he never could beat the last wave

G - The volcanic dogs were too hot
G - And Mike's bow could hit them not
H - He explored the depths of Daemonheim
H - But found each floor a harder time

E - As fellow raiders made fun of his beak
E - He pondered, 'this life is not what I seek'
I - So he returned to the Mining Guild
I - With a broken heart to rebuild

D - As he couldn't win the trust of Ava
D (if you pronounce it quickly) - Who fled to her native Entrana
J - Mike in his deep thoughts became sad
J - As children with no manners said he was bad

K - To this day Mike fights off the trolls
L - Showing them he has conviction
K - He will show them fools
L within L - How much gumption comes from within

The End.

This rhymes better and has a set rhyme scheme.

12-Aug-2012 16:02:00

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Goodbye to you, my trusted friend.
We've known each other since we're nine or ten.
Together we climbed hills or trees.
Learned of love and ABC's,
skinned our hearts and skinned our knees.
Goodbye my friend, it's hard to die,
when all the birds are singing in the sky,
Now that the spring is in the air.
Pretty girls are everywhere.
When you see them I'll be there.
We had joy, we had fun, we had seasons in the sun.
But the hills that we climbed
were just seasons out of time.
Goodbye, Papa, please pray for me,
I was the black sheep of the family.
You tried to teach me right from wrong.
Too much wine and too much song,
wonder how I get along.
Goodbye, Papa, it's hard to die
when all the birds are singing in the sky,
Now that the spring is in the air.
Little children everywhere.
When you see them I'll be there.
We had joy, we had fun, we had seasons in the sun.
But the wine and the song,
like the seasons, all have gone.
Goodbye, Michelle, my little one.
You gave me love and helped me find the sun.
And every time that I was down
you would always come around
and get my feet back on the ground.
Goodbye, Michelle, it's hard to die
when all the bird are singing in the sky,
Now that the spring is in the air.
With the flowers ev'rywhere.
I wish that we could both be there.
We had joy, we had fun, we had seasons in the sun.
But the stars we could reach
were just starfishs on the beach

21-Aug-2012 18:31:38

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