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Channell
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Chapture 1 - the fall of the Legend.
Blood spilled onto the the bright green field. A soldier that controlled each peace of dragon gear was battleing in a battle that soon changed the world for ever. The soldier had no name but was known for being a legend the only controller of the dragon weaponrey. Sliceing and stabing with his dragon long sword, he looked un beat able. Plungeing his sword down the throat of a loan soldier. Spinning and pulling out his dragon spear he stabbed a man who was lunging towards him. Spinning his spear knocking his foes backwards. Tossing the spear threw three soldiers bodies like a siscobob. Pulling out two duel wield scimitars just slaughtering his opposing threats he was unstopable. throwing both scimitars like sminning blades mowing down soldiers. Dragon hally was helping his longer attacks so he just kept swiging until it gets stuck in a collar bone of a man. Dragon mace braking shields and his dragon ax ripping the flesh off the bones. tossing them aside he pulls out a shield that could breath fire of a dragon. burning the flesh off everyone. the battle was heating up and he he now lost his dragon kite shield and was useing the cross bow. out of ammo tossing it aside he layes quike fast strinkes with his dragon dagger then throwing it at his on coming attacker. raising his shield it gets split into two and he falls to the ground. His full helmet fell of and plate body shatered into three peaces. now wearing his dragon chain that he had under. sliceing and clawing at everything that moves with his dragon claws were fast and fierce. Opening his mouth and breathing fire he thought he was close to killing the last but they kept coming. pulling out the fierce dragon two handed breaking the bones and ripping the flesh of his victims he battled threw waves and waves of on coming soldiers. he knew he could not go on so he stabbed the blade into the ground creating an explosion killing millions before his death and no was standing.

06-Jul-2012 09:58:55

Channell
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chapture 2 the present time
A man named luke walked out of his farm in lumby. Looked up at the bright blue sky and the golden ring that surounded the sun. all was peacful in the world of runescape. the adventures would pass by day by day to kill the goblins acrosse the river, and the mercents would come to great the new born in the lumby court yard. luke always wanted to be a hero but was only a simple farm boy. he did his chores and went to bed hopping and dreaming of being an adventurer. at around 3 am he woke up went out side to look at the stars. he loved them and wished he could hold them in the palm of his hand. as he looked he saw a shooting star falling. he made a wish to be the greatest adventurer of them all. then the star crashed south near the desert. he knew some miners were already on the spot with the great rune pick axes and rune armor of the champions. He fell asleep in the field only to be woken by screams and smoke. a dark soldier was burning the farm. he had a dark beard a scar over his right eye and big musles. He had a dark bow on his back and a granite maul in one hand. in the other hand he held a staff that luke had never seen and a sword around the waist he also had not been fermiler with. luke sat in fear watching his family die, head and limbs falling and his farm burnt to the ground. hours of sitting and crying went by. he felt alone no one left for him. a lady a gostly figure came from the smoke. it was his mother. "go luke and be the legend" she said. "but how can i" luke replied. "the legend of the dragon born lives in you" and she vanished. Luke stood up and just walked feeling empty but knowing following his heart towards the lumby woods.

07-Jul-2012 05:42:43

Azigarath

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Paragraphs should have at least three sentences, and a sentence should have at least three words. Dialogue always begins on its own line when another character speaks, but further non-dialogue sentences can commence after a character speaks. If the same character is still speaking, further dialogue can be used without beginning on another line.

Sentence
A sentence needs a subject, a predicate, and a verb, and then a complete thought. If any of the four are missing, it will be a sentence fragment.
Sentence fragments begin with words like “that”, “if”, “when”, “while”, “where”, “which”, “who”, “whose”. One exception is a subordinate clause, and it's a sentence that begins with a subordinating word such as “if”, but is incomplete by itself. Subordinate clauses have to connect to the main clause.
The sentence needs to tell the reader why something is happening. The information is essential for the sentence to have a full meaning. The connection of words should be made clear so that the audience (your reader) can read the story without misinterpreting the happenings.
A comma is not placed before words like “because” or “who”. Information before the comma are important for the sentence but everything after the comma is another part.
A clause is a group of words, so a sentence is a clause. Any other “line” of words, such as that of poems and plays, generally are also a clause.
The first letter of every sentence must be capitalised (put in upper case).
Names of people and places must also be capitalised. For example, Buckingham Palace has two capitalisations, for the palace is named. Rewording it, Palace of Buckingham would also require two capitalisations as the palace is still named. Named vehicles should be in Italics.

27-May-2013 20:51:15 - Last edited on 27-May-2013 20:52:51 by Azigarath

Azigarath

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Colon ,
Used before a list that may be preceded by words like “such as” or “the following,” so the colon replaces the two examples.
Can be used before a list of words that explain a noun.
Used after the opening of a business letter.
Can be used between two independent clauses if the second clause explains the first.

Semicolon ;
Can be used between independent clauses not joined by “and”, “but” or “or”. Can replace the “but”, “or” or “and” and a comma.

Quotation marks “”
English use “”
Quotation marks can begin or finalise with “character said”.
Not used for your own words or thoughts unless you yourself are a character within the material who is speaking to someone.
The comma, mark or period goes inside the end quotation mark for dialogue, even when it is not part of the quotation. Only one is used, so anything such as “!!!???.,” is informal and incorrect, only one is needed depending on the dialogue.

Exceptions of any rule is OK in creative writing, however it should not be overused.

I hope this helps. I read your story but I cannot offer feedback just yet.

27-May-2013 20:51:23 - Last edited on 27-May-2013 20:52:00 by Azigarath

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